Lady Sydney

Everyone's covered all the bases that you need to improve this... a lot. So, I will not echo. Keep trying. ~*Sydney*~

This is a late thank you, smorg, but I don't think this will continue for a while. I have a novel that I'm working on, it's called "Heiress" if you ...

Ah. I understand what you mean. ^_^ Well, if that's the case, then you did well. You're welcome, by the way. ~*Sydney*~

Thanks yoha_ahoy! ^_^

Ah. I see what you mean. Thanks!

Ditto with Cade. We see this kind of poetry so much that it needs its own category/forum thing. Be original with your work and post something that'll blow us away ...

That was really well done, but you've got work on your capitalization and punctuation. :wink: I enjoyed this though. Keep it up! ~*Sydney*~

This is a little late, but thank you a bunch for your critiques! I'm thinking about publishing this soon, so all comments are welcome. The good and the bad, the ...

You kinda threw me off with the repetition of "Is like fine grains of sand", but it seemed pretty good besides that. I liked it! ^_^ ~*Sydney*~

Thanks for your compliment and suggestion, Gilth. ^_^ I will be posting another poem later on in the week, if you're interested in reading. It will, of course, be Romance. ...

It could be just me, but you don't sound too appreciative of what we've said. You posted what you had, and we critiqued it. Nowhere in your story did you ...

Your favorite? Really? Wow. Hehe Thanks! ^_^ As for the scene with Charlotte falling, I have to agree that it IS a bit weird. I'll try to see if I ...

Thanks Jabber and Andy for putting this through the shredder and picking out all the little mistakes and improvements I can make. Very helpful! ~Syd

Thank you for your comments. =) ~Syd

Thanks again! :D